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Final Moments...
Posted by cardiffgirl from Cardiff - Published on 07/09/2009 at 00:00
- Tagged as Creative Writing
The boy had gone so far in the last five hours.
He was tired, cold, hungry and neglected by everyone he loved.
The night breeze brushed against his pale face as he passed the chapel. The boy was only eleven and was too weak to be walking around the roughest place in Wales at one o'clock in the morning, a time when crime was high.
The boy had left his cruel house when he had accidentally smashed a mug and was smacked and sent to his room. He escaped by climbing down the balcony that was built outside his bedroom window.
So, here he stood, looking up at his friend Jamie’s house. He walked around the back and Jamie was out there in his dressing gown. "You’re late!" whispered Jamie to the boy, "You were meant to be here half an hour ago!”.
"I'm sorry" apologised the boy "Please can I have some food?"
"Of course you can!" said Jamie, "I’m glad you called me Leo, because I wanted to talk to you... oh, we should get you some food first, come into the kitchen but you have to be quiet, my mum is asleep."
They tiptoed into the kitchen and Jamie got some left over pizza slices and gave them to Leo. Leo had finished the first one when they heard Jamie’s mum coming down the stairs. "Go!" whispered Jamie with alertness in his tone "Go! Now!"
Leo didn't need telling more than once. He ran out of the kitchen from the back door and he ran for ten minutes straight. He stopped for breath. He looked to his left and saw an alley and to the right a row of streets and in front, oh God, in front there was a bunch of police officers.
He wanted to avoid them so he ran down the alley and hid in the shadows. He walked down the alley silently until he came to the end.
But something happened to the boy...
Something was waiting for him at the end of the alley...
Death...
At the hands of a vampire!
6 Comments – Post a comment
Sambow
Commented 33 months ago - 7th September 2009 - 15:45pm
Haha!!
Great story!! I loved the ending ^.^
lol, it was really good :) You know... Maybe you had a brother...
And maybe this is his story, and you live with a vampire!!!! Oh my, That's why you like vampires so much? Or maybe it's just cause they rock! hehe, people must hate our obsessivness.. :P lol
I love how the sprout has stopped showing recomendations for other posts but just put them all at the bottom instead, It's our fault!!!! lol!!! Ah well, we can be proud of it ;D Good story! (did I already say that?) Oh well it's true!
Vamps Rule (Do I need to say it?)
PEACE OUT!
Sambow x
emb789
Commented 33 months ago - 7th September 2009 - 16:30pm
This is really good, well done :)
I really want to know what happens to the boy now, does he become a vampire or die???
I've seen a lot of your posts, your really good at osting, especially about vapires! Well done :)
amy.brown123
Commented 33 months ago - 8th September 2009 - 20:35pm
Thats COOL!! does he die or become a vamp? ur cool ;D
AmyX
cardiffgirl
Commented 32 months ago - 9th September 2009 - 18:13pm
If you would like to see part two then tell me and I will type one! Since I have nothing better to do! Lol!!
Keep it cool
Cardiffgirl
P.S I don't have anything honestly to do... trust me... Its either this or my homework!!
Sambow
Commented 32 months ago - 20th September 2009 - 15:02pm
lol I'm sorry i was so bored and was desprate for you to make the sequel so I kinda of made one :P
Lol I want you to make the triquel!! your good at postingg ^.^
cardiffgirl
Commented 32 months ago - 2nd October 2009 - 14:40pm
Cheeras and I read your sequal and it is amazing!
Cheers and don't worry about it... everyone gets bored.